Lost and found
First draft
W.A.L.T write a narrative
Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when….
The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
Include a twist to add interest.
It was 1961 at the Russian space core. All I heard was the countdown. I was nervous and scared, my heart was beating like a crazed drum. The feeling of stage-fright had kicked in.
Voice says.
“3, 2, 1”
Kaboom! I was hasting on the scurrying rocket crashing roughly through the air.
On my way to space I was thinking of all chimps, why me? Did I have something the other chimps didn’t or was it the other way around? Why couldn’t the other chimps take the training I did? Was Reznov not able to teach the other chimps?
Transmission turns on “Hello it’s Reznov. You’ve reached space and will be put to sleep soon. Good bye”. I tried respond but I knew he wouldn’t hear.
65 years later…..
I awaken dazed and confused, I look in the window and remember myself , seeing my brown eyes, my moustache and my old wrinkly face, it gives me all my thinking space and memories. I see space glaring towards me like a shiny polished emerald. The dark space covers my eye’s, the stars guide me through space. I feel the gravity in space pulling me out of my chair trying to make me drift away. I catch a glimpse of earth my home , Earth illuminated brightly.
My space shuttle started drifting towards earth, I was gratified.
I was descending, crashing roughly threw the air, I grabbed the photo of Reznov and clenched it, I closed my eyes thinking I wouldn’t make it. I hear a giant Clunk! I open my eyes seeing an eradicated earth.
Terra Firma !!
I walked around feeling like there was life around the area, there was nothing.
I shrieked, “Reznov!! Why couldn’t you survive?”
I grabbed the photo of Reznov and ripped it to pieces.
While I started sprinting in this hellish area I started thinking there was nobody here.
I felt an overwhelming presence darting towards me, I turned around cautious and aware.
I blacked out……
I awaked bleeding and bruised, I try walk away but the pain overwhelmed me, I hear a voice saying.
“Move and you will die simple as that.”
I said.
“Who are you ?“
“Just a hunter .”
I said.
“Why do you do this ?”
He shouted.
“To SURVIVE !”
3 Hours Later…….
The hunter was asleep gun in hand.
I had a chance to grasp freedom and I took it, I slowly walked away trying to survive sadly he awoke and sprinted with a knife I tried run but my old legs couldn’t survive he tied me and broke me I suffered.
He asked for my last words.
I said.
“I’ll see you again Reznov.”
By Aron
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Punctuation
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Vocabulary
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Self
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R4
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Peer
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This is a writing table.
We use this to upgrade our writing, by cooperating and choosing ranks.
Their are certain ranks to choose from R1 to R7
R1 being the lowest and R7 being the Highest.
R7 is you have few mistakes.
R1 is you've got a lot of mistakes.